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Elastic Bands and Ice Cream by ~Effamay:iconEffamay:



The same noise could be achieved with
an empty ice cream tub
and elastic bands that the postman had dropped
but it wouldn’t be quite the same


          the clatter from plucked strings
                      is forever controlled by you


but even with practice
and perfected technique
it’ll never mimic an acoustic
of real oak or metallic
that forever echo masterpiece
beneath trained fingertips

still, it’s something to play with
to distract you from dinner and call you
in deterrence from your other possessions


          until you get bored
              and the next one comes along


                             or until the old one scurries away
                      while you’re out shopping for
                 a newer obsession.

you don’t know yet
you’ll find out when you get home
that I’ve taken myself
back to the toyshop
and strode into the store beside

morphed myself into
the invaluable purchase of a
Fender Stratocaster

                   I feel no guilt, for
                                       I know
         you’ll find someone else to play with.

My sound?
you don’t have to binge on ice cream
to make me work.
for I’m the Real Thing,
crucial in your friend’s band
playing on their debut album.
©2007-2009 ~Effamay
:iconeffamay:

Author's Comments

"...tubs" finishes the title.

"Be a first rate version of yourself,
not a second rate version of someone else
"
is what this is based upon.
It's so much more fun to be unique, didn't you know?

n.b: Fender Stratocaster is a "real" guitar.

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:iconrockerbybaby:
Well I saw you posted a new deviation :boogie: and couldn't resist reading it immediately, 'cause I'm just not all that tired yet and love reading your works of art anyway.

Plus I've been the most terrible watcher, and for a long time, due to my last class and Christmas kidnapping my attention elsewhere for the time being. But lookie now; first comment! :-P

Anyway Emma, WOW :jawdrop: and :omg: how you used metaphors to the fullest extent here; that's freaking clever how you managed it, too. :+favlove:



:) :heart: :rose:

--
Across the face of the Earth, her ruby cheeks shone; Winds of whisper buried seeds of rumor, made her secret well grown.
:iconpoeticjournalism:
oh my god...instant favorite. You are so unique. This seriously just blew me away. AWESOME job!

--
"I'm no fucking Buddhist, but this is enlightenment"
:iconblue-strawberry:
Wow. The first thought I had was, wow, if you're gonna be a guitar that's the one to be! Do you know how cool those things are?! Crucial in your friends band if you happen to be friends with Hendrix! Great choice :thumbsup: :)

but yes, getting past the guitar. The poem knocked me for 6, in the good way. It's so powerful.
I particularly like the differences in the sounds you hear at the start and the sounds you hear at the end.
Astounding writing.

--
You have four nostrils, just to let you know.
:iconeffamay:
Aw, bless you! My writing was preferred over sleep! hehe, what a glorious thought :D

I love being first comment :) I have nooo idea why... but I do enjoy it :heart:

Thank you! thank you thank you :rose:

I love metaphors... you may have noticed :p

--
Dum spiro spero.
:iconeffamay:
'tis one of the things I'd like to be :P Thank you! :)

--
Dum spiro spero.
:icongaijinkenjutsu:
Bon travail, effie.
I like this. Alot, and I can't believe I missed it the first time I was checking through deviations. Woot
:+fav:

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...Sic transit gloria mundi.....
:iconeffamay:
It beats being an ice cream box! Even the luxury stuff couldn't compare. And.. Funnily enough, the Carte Dor concert didn'tout-sell Hendrix :)

Thank you so much:)

--
Dum spiro spero.
:iconeffamay:
Merci beaucoup :D

I quite like being called effie :)

Thankyou:)

You're not the only one to do that :blush: :)

--
Dum spiro spero.
:icongaijinkenjutsu:
I'm sorry about that....
BTW, do other people call you effie?

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...Sic transit gloria mundi.....
:iconeffamay:
No worries:)

One person used to, then I had maya for a while... but no, only you.

--
Dum spiro spero.

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