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breeze between my teeth by ~Effamay:iconEffamay:

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You were waiting for me to answer your question.

Seconds of silence were enough to
murder any ideas I had of lying

so I spoke

                                        running in
                                  open wheat fields
                               
                                  with energy
                      line dancing through my veins

                        the hurdles
                                in my path
                     ready to snap across my thighs
                           with my gathering speed


freely.
©2008-2009 ~Effamay
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after stuggling for ideas to write, I took an old tactic of mine and that of someone who will know who she is,

and rambled in prose until an idea came to me.

et voila - this came along.

-honesty is the best policy-
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=Darkness-Cy-Shadow:iconDarkness-Cy-Shadow: Apr 29, 2008, 12:18:33 PM
Always.

--
"She looked into your eyes,
And saw what lay beneath,
Don't try to save yourself,
The circle is complete"

Hold your Colour - Pendulum
~Effamay:iconEffamay: Apr 29, 2008, 12:24:02 PM
:nod::)

--
Dum spiro spero.
=Infrunitas:iconInfrunitas: Apr 29, 2008, 3:38:05 PM
I enjoy the softness to this piece. A nice feel during a study break.

--
To twist one purest cause
Into an honest verse,
Itself, a call to angels.
The saddened lips of song that
Kiss away our innocence
From the vile mundane.
~justb
*Blueskye27:iconBlueskye27: Apr 29, 2008, 4:35:06 PM
I love the play with structure. Somehow, it reminds me of something I've seen in the last few days...:aww:

Great poem! :clap:
~RockerByBaby:iconRockerByBaby: Apr 29, 2008, 9:40:59 PM
Oh my wow, :lol: I am so tired right now, but I still told myself that I had to read at least one or two of your recent pieces that you've been posting!=P

And I'm rather glad I did, it's been a while, and I love to read your stuff. :D

But I would rather read the rest when I can actually do that thing, called....umm, yea, think straight!;)

:giggle:

Hope everything is as splendid as can be with you, take care dear! :) :hug:

--
Across the face of the Earth, her ruby cheeks shone; Winds of whisper buried seeds of rumor, made her secret well grown.
*duskydawn:iconduskydawn: May 1, 2008, 2:36:41 AM
*stops doing essay to repeatedly reread*

--
You've thrown the worst fear
That can ever be hurled
Fear to bring children
Into the world
- Bob Dylan, "Masters of War"
:cling:
~Effamay:iconEffamay: May 1, 2008, 12:14:52 PM
that could be good, that could be very very bad :nod:

--
Dum spiro spero.
~Silica-Streak:iconSilica-Streak: May 1, 2008, 10:11:14 PM
Your writing is honest always and always honest.

It's a great policy to live by and to write by. Great job!
*duskydawn:iconduskydawn: May 1, 2008, 11:38:48 PM
Nah, I finished it. No harm done. ^_^''

--
You've thrown the worst fear
That can ever be hurled
Fear to bring children
Into the world
- Bob Dylan, "Masters of War"
:cling:
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