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living through even numbers by ~Effamay:iconEffamay:

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Our hands join
with twenty interlocking fingers,
spinning eight times and falling
into two kisses;

and then you run to your second girlfriend

for three magical brushes of noses,
and with your five fingers wrapped around her wrist
you drag her away from seeing the truth.

It will take two lips to reveal your double life,
revealing this
one
lie you have told.

I'll have nothing left, and neither will you;
but I guess that'll makes two of us.
©2008-2009 ~Effamay
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ultimatums never did appeal to me, but sometimes
you just can't have it all.

this is fresh in words, but stale in idea. and it's angry. whether it shows it or not, this piece is angry.


'the tables have turned' I say. no, actually, I say:
throw the damned things away and let's start again.


...that doesn't make sense to you, does it? anyway.
I'd planned to do deviations/comments tonight but my bed is calling me. soon.
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=TalkingOfTheTrees:iconTalkingOfTheTrees: May 15, 2008, 3:10:08 PM
yeesh, yes angry :S ..

you're alright?....right?

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corporations interpret "loyalty" the way a prisoner might interpret "dropping the soap".
~y0urstalker:icony0urstalker: May 15, 2008, 7:18:39 PM
sorry I know it has nothing to do with this but I know a man who forgot to get his wife tulips for valentine's day and it was really late, he'd been working all day and went home and said "tulips I have none, but these two lips are yours" nevertheless she didn't take it.

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002110 Goto 013500
013500 Peek 16388, 236
013510 Poke 16389, 346
=drop-asd:icondrop-asd: May 15, 2008, 8:57:38 PM
:giggle: This is awesome!

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Una canzone può anche non parlar d'amore...

"A song can also not talk about love..."
~redclay1103:iconredclay1103: May 16, 2008, 12:27:47 AM
I like it. The use of numbers, the story it tells, and the ending is quite... satirical? Maybe comical. Either way, it's good.

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If you enjoy my uncanny scrawling then visit my blog, if you dare. [link]
=whydoidothiseveryday:iconwhydoidothiseveryday: May 16, 2008, 2:05:59 AM
ooo i like the numbers thing, well done
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You can't always get what you want.
~Benji-man:iconBenji-man: May 16, 2008, 9:26:20 AM
16 fingers, 4 thumbs! then 4 fingers and a thumb! Know thy anatomy

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I was here,
Here I was,
Was I here?
Yes, I was
*duskydawn:iconduskydawn: May 16, 2008, 6:59:46 PM
Actually, I see the anger very plainly. Eech. I wouldn't like to be on the receiving end of that, were it to be expressed in anything other than art.

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You've thrown the worst fear
That can ever be hurled
Fear to bring children
Into the world
- Bob Dylan, "Masters of War"
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~Effamay:iconEffamay: May 17, 2008, 1:56:24 AM
that's thumbist. or fingerist.

or just... anyway, I had reasoning: saying 'digits' sounded far to mechanical and could include toes, and added lots of syllables.

ah, well.

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Dum spiro spero.
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