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My skin is the epitome of my strength,
everything contained beneath is held
in the shape of a human body

even when inside it's
crumbled like cookie dough
with too much flour;
falling through a sieve

on to the floor with a crash

so loud that maybe the shock of the
noise could keep him alive
just a little bit longer.
©2009 ~Effamay
:iconeffamay:

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I didn't know I had it in me to calmly say 'okay' like I'd been given directions
because I was otherwise needed.

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:iconposhepocket:
Reflects my mood.

--
Weird is word used to describe someone who you do not fully understand. I am weird.
:iconeffamay:
:hug:

--
Dum spiro spero.

"You can't deny laughter; when it comes, it plops down in your favorite chair and stays as long as it wants."
:iconkitz-the-kitsune:
Very visual. I can see the cookie dough and hear something clattering. Lovely. :)

But in the first stanza you say skin twice, too close together.

My skin is the epitome of my strength
holding everything contained beneath my skin


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"But, here and there, a lonely bubble answered, 'We are the stream,' and there was neither surprise nor indignation in their voices, but just quiet certitude." - Ask the awakened by Wei Wu Wei
:iconrockerbybaby:
So original and powerful, I'll say no more..



:cake: :milk:

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Across the face of the Earth, her ruby cheeks shone; Winds of whisper buried seeds of rumor, made her secret well grown.
:iconeffamay:
:cuddle: :heart:

--
Dum spiro spero.

"You can't deny laughter; when it comes, it plops down in your favorite chair and stays as long as it wants."
:iconeffamay:
Awesome. Thank you.

Bah, I do, don't I?! Waiiit a minute...

--
Dum spiro spero.

"You can't deny laughter; when it comes, it plops down in your favorite chair and stays as long as it wants."

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