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realities and frozen toes by ~Effamay:iconEffamay:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open


Your heart is made of iron filings,
     ready to attach to
        anyone you find attractive;
            but no matter how strong the pull
               they’ll never be enough
                  to melt and remould you.

                                           I watch you
                                                       with my
                                                flames for pupils;

     knowing

                  where pure oxygen waits
              for me, and I
     walk away,
leaving footprints in snow.
©2009 ~Effamay
:iconeffamay:

Author's Comments

epiphanies, realities, and frozen toes - full title

even if I am verbally dumbfounded, I'll probably still be able to write something (even if it is a bit crap).

I am going to consider that an asset.

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~Tenri Jan 7, 2009, 4:33:57 PM
I love the iron filings/magnet metaphor. It's a really strong image. :)

--
"And the universe just vanished out of sight,
And all the stars collapsed behind the pitch black night."

Warmer Climate - Snow Patrol
:iconrockerbybaby:
~RockerByBaby Jan 7, 2009, 6:48:11 PM
You get the reader all fired up right before the chilly ending. POWERFUL! :clap:


:love: :butterfly:

--
Across the face of the Earth, her ruby cheeks shone; Winds of whisper buried seeds of rumor, made her secret well grown.
:iconirrevocablefate:
*IrrevocableFate Jan 7, 2009, 8:40:48 PM
Oh I love some of the imagery you use, so powerful and chilling. I simply love the first stanza. :heart: Great job!

--
Hello world! I love you. :eager:
:iconduskydawn:
~duskydawn Jan 7, 2009, 8:59:07 PM
The situation, although ambiguous, is uncannily familiar. As always, your work rings true.

--
"People think love is an emotion. Love is good sense."

- Ken Kesey
:iconislamzreviver:
~IslamzReviver Jan 8, 2009, 3:07:48 AM
I love the frozen toes part
U conjure the most vivid images.

--
Rough diamonds may sometimes be mistaken for worthless pebbles" thomas browne....

~I am in danger of never falling in love with a "real" guy... I've lost my heart to fictional characters and there's no returning it~
:iconmagnanimousmorris:
~magnanimousmorris Jan 9, 2009, 9:33:06 PM
the iron filings metaphor is brilliant and original. this is beautiful :heart:
:iconinfrunitas:
=Infrunitas Jan 15, 2009, 1:17:06 PM
With the regular adjectives and graceful terms to be used, i lace with my words I Really like this

--
To twist one purest cause
Into an honest verse,
Itself, a call to angels.
The saddened lips of song that
Kiss away our innocence
From the vile mundane.
~justb
:iconredearthofterra:
=RedEarthofTerra Jan 15, 2009, 6:03:33 PM
I know what you mean.
Somehow, I'm not good at explaining things, but poetry is my nature. :aww:
Great poem. :)

--
Everybody sing like it's the last song you will ever sing.
- Paramore.

:blackrose: Jessa Rose :rose:
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